Mommy’s smile was like bubbles on a breeze. And as she turned and called his name, she
grinned and held her hand out for him to run and clasp it. The birds were chirping cheerily. Daddy had gone off with Nana to get him an ice
cream cone. The world was happy and
round and fat and smelled of coconut sunscreen.
Far away, in the distance, mountains rose in picture book blue and he
thought to himself: there must be magic going on in a place like that. Though, for the time being, he was content to
just … take in that sunny day. He didn’t
know, then – that he had, accidentally, inhaled the enchanted moment on sweet
breaths, that would bestow a reminiscent wisp of serenity to waft round him tenderly … all the days of his
life.
early on, he
grasped …
there are stories everywhere
that make your heart soar
there are stories everywhere
that make your heart soar
notes: a haibun –
my first attempt at prose and haiku.
posted for Poets United.
posted for Poets United.
photo: Whistler Village, Whistler, BC with mountains in the background (site of the 2010 Winter Olympics)
– W. Bourke
– W. Bourke
©
2015 Wendy Bourke
Wendy, this really makes MY heart soar. So very true about stories -- we can find them even in the simplest events of life. And....we do! And....you do! Smiles.
ReplyDeleteThis is so heart-warming..! Loved reading it :D
ReplyDeleteThe haibun is beautiful.. like petals of a rose!
Lots of love
xoxo
I like how you recreated that moment for us, Wendy. I think sweet and vivid childhood memories are part of what makes us strong.
ReplyDeletemany of us never learn to take in the moment NOW. a wonderful haibun!
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A warm, charming capture. I love your details: bubbles on a breeze, round and fat and smelled of coconut sunscreen, accidentally inhaled the enchanted moment.
ReplyDeleteI love that the sun "smelled of coconut sunscreen" to the little boy. It's such a small detail, but it says so much about the times and about the way the mind works.
ReplyDeleteah those magic moments... how cool to inhale them deeply... and so true about the stories as well...
ReplyDeleteI have to agree with others who have come before me. Your haibun is delightfully filled with sharply detailed imagery and emotions. Your concluding haiku is true and wise,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
A great start - you nailed this Wendy - very uplifting... With Best Wishes Scott
ReplyDeleteThose magical moments that we never want to pass.. I really enjoyed reading it. You did really well in your first attempt. Keep penning. :)
ReplyDeleteThere are inspiring stories around the world. It's good to read them. A very sincere haibun
ReplyDeletelove this breeze of happiness all around this magically woven haibun Wendy...
ReplyDeletesweet and simple things in life are free!
ReplyDeleteVery very nice! I am now smelling coconut sunscreen and feeling all's well in the world. Beautiful writing.
ReplyDeleteNice! I really dig this style!
ReplyDeleteWendy. I really like this.. the wisdom of you prose enhanced by the haiku.. I like poetry that make me think, and this sounds like someone who might grow up to a wise man.
ReplyDeleteA writer must start somewhere.
ReplyDeleteThere are stories everywhere, adventures just waiting to happen. I enjoyed your story and haiku.,
ReplyDeletemountains rose in picture book blue..this makes me want to turn the page and get a glimpse.
There is something about the smell of coconut sunscreen...it is one of those things that becomes embedded in olfactory memory and brings up a whole sense of story every time you smell it ever after!!
ReplyDeleteWendy,
ReplyDeleteI remember feeling so thrilled, the very first time I viewed the Eiffel Tower, as we flew into Paris. I could not believe that I was there..Years later, my heart stops in many new places too. California Pacific coast, motivates me so much!!
Eileen